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The story of Romeo and Juliet has been passed down through centuries. Everyone knows the tragic fate for the two star-crosses lovers but what would happen if they were in present times?....Live or die? In my storybook I am challenging the classic story and giving it a spin! Here it is, do hope you enjoy!
.....Defying the Stars
Hi Crystel, I like how you limited your story to just a quote from William Shakespeare. I know that Romeo and Juliet is a very popular story from the author and knowing that you will cover it seems like it would be awesome. I love the aspect of the story and how they had a forbidden love and ended up dying for it. I am wondering if your story will either add on to the ending of Romeo and Juliet or if your going to put a completely different twist to the story? Also in your story, will you delve further into the rivalry of the two families so that readers could have a better insight on why the families have a strong dislike towards one another? That would be something i think you should explore when writing your story, I am excited on how your story will turn out when you are finished with it.
ReplyDeleteHi Crystel! I was surprised by your story. Based on the title I assumed it was going to pertain to the constellations. I still enjoyed reading your rendition of this classic love story, however! I thought it was a really cool concept. I feel like the original story has withstood the test of time, and has remained a relevant and relatable piece of media. There have been several versions of this story, so I am curious about how you plan to make it your own! I am excited to read more from you!!
ReplyDeleteHey Crystel! I think that's an interesting concept that you have. I definitely agree that William Shakespeare's "Romeo and Juliet" is very universal in nature, and that it can still be applied in modern times. People are definitely still going through what Romeo and Juliet went through, albeit less dramatic, just through race, sexual orientation, or even financial status. There are so many different interpretations and retellings of the story of Romeo and Juliet. I can't wait to see the direction that you have with the story that you have in mind. I'm sure that it will be very interesting and a refreshing take on the classic story. I'm curious as to how the ending of your story would be. I think that the deaths of Romeo and Juliet are a very critical aspect of the story, so it will be interesting to see the different direction that you decide to take.
ReplyDeleteHi Crystel! I was interested in your storybook because the title and reference to constellations really interested me. I like the look of your storybook and the overall theme! I have a few suggestions for you. First, provide a link to your comment wall on your Home page or/and Intro pages. It will allow people to make comments more efficiently. Also, on your introduction page, your sentence that begins with “Via not only Romeo’s friend…” did not make sense. I don’t understand the “via”, is it a name or are you trying to say how the two families are rivals? Finally, when you say “were in present times?...were homosexual?” make sure that you capitalize the Were’s because they are technically new sentences. Other than that, I really like how you have the option for people to help you with how you should end the last storybook, but I also want to see how you will end it. I’m excited to read more from you!
ReplyDeleteHey Crystel! I am so excited to read more from your storybook, as I love the story of Romeo and Juliet! I just read TWo Lucky Lovers and I'm having the hardest time trying to think of ways that the story can be improved. I think it would interesting to see some dialogue in which Benvolio tries to convince Romeo to go to the party. This would be a great place for Romeo to say something like "no. Why would I want to go to a Capulet party? There is no family that I despise more." and then you could go on to let Romeo give a very short backstory about the Montague-Capulet family relationship from the beginning of the story. Romeo could also talk about the repercussions that he would face if his family found out that he was going to a Capulet party for fun so that your readers that haven't read Romeo and Juliet would get how much the families actively hated each other.
ReplyDeleteI absolutely loved your alternate ending to Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet. The inclusion of quotes from the original play in your story really gave it a nice touch too. Also, I don't know you could put GIFs in! That's so cool! I think the fact that you included a google form at the end of your introduction for suggestions was a great idea too. Can I request that in the homosexual version you just have Romeo fall for Tybalt instead of Juliette? But do it in a way that Juliette still thinks Romeo is in love with her. That would be funny. The one critique I have is that I couldn't find the link to this comment wall from your storybook page. Do you think you could add that to the bibliography or home page? Or if it's already there, make it more obvious? You're off to a great start. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHey Crystel! I'm really intrigued by the different ways you want to incorporate different endings for Romeo and Juliet. I don't blame you for disliking the original ending. I don't know why they couldn't have tried to communicate better and make sure Romeo knew of the plan before it was acted upon. At the very least, the nurse could've been at the burial waiting for Romeo to arrive so it could be explained to him, just in case. In your first story, I'm pleasantly surprised that they were able to put their familial differences aside in order to make their children happy. I can't imagine the fear Romeo must have had when he was at the party, knowing what might happen to him if he was discovered. It makes me wonder what exactly started the feud between them. Does it go so far back that no one even knows why anymore? Great job with your project so far!
ReplyDeleteHi Crystel! I also thought your storybook would be about stars and constellations. First, the animated kissing GIF on the "Two Lucky Lovers" is a bit distracting. I never liked the original ending either so I'm glad that you are trying out different endings. I like your version of the story. I wonder why there was ever a feud between the two families--why does no one ever talk about anything other than the two families hating each other? It seems unlikely that the happy ending would go quite as easily as it did in your story, but I'm happy that Romeo & Juilet finally get their happy ending. Good job so far!
ReplyDeleteHi Crystel! I really enjoyed exploring your storybook. I thought that you came up with a really great concept that people would be familiar with and gave it your own touch. The alternate ending you came up with was great! I'd much rather read your ending than the ultimate tragedy of the original story. I like how your storybook is a nice refreshing version of an otherwise burnt out tale. Overall, I think that you're doing a really great job so far and I am excited to see the finished product!
ReplyDeleteHey there Crystel! I just got the chance to read through your storybook and I really loved the overall theme that you chose! Since I am in Professor Gibbs' other class, I am not as familiar with the stories that you have read, but I still feel like I was able to understand what was going on in the original story and grasp on to the things you have changed too. I really enjoyed how you gave the readers some choices, as I have no tech. knowledge on how to add all of the fancy stuff that you did. However, be careful to not have too much going on, because like some others commented above, things can be a little overboard and distract from your excellent writing skills. I really look forward to checking out your page in the future as the semester comes to a close. Great job overall!
ReplyDeleteHi Crystel, I really enjoyed reading your story Two Lucky Lovers! I think your story is very well written and is easy to follow. I like how your kept many aspects of the traditional story but also added new elements that do not detract from the traditional aspects. Your author’s note was very helpful to determine your goal for the story, which I think you accomplished. I like how the ending, instead of focusing on death, featuring a happy-ending. I think this creates a really unique aspect to your version of the story. Just as a note, for your bibliography you are supposed to also include the author, not just the title. Overall, I think you created a great story! Also, I like how you set up your project website. I especially like your homepage. I think the quote is the perfect touch for the homepage. Your website is very clear and easy to use as well.
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